Analyzing rough drafts part 2

1. What is the claim?
1. “Over complication of devices on automobiles is a major danger, and should be addressed with simple, proven old schools mechanical designs.”End of the introduction paragraph.
2. Simplicity is better when designing automobile functions. Simple is safer.

2. What support does the writer offer for the claim?
1. Logic regarding complexity and how things are prone to fail. Statistics about deaths from malfunctions of electronics, and how they could be solved from simple mechanical designs
2. Facts about car crashes and how proven designs last
3. Yes
3. How evenhandedly does the writer present the issues?
1. The mention of how new technology is intriguing to consumers, but then the evidence showing that they don't really know what's for their own good.
2. Responding to them reasonably and small refutes
3. Somewhat dismissively, but still acknowledging the fact that they are logical in a business mindset
4. Yes
4. What authorities or sources of the outside information does the writer use?
1. Uses magazine article to illustrate theories, and news cites to back theories with facts
2. The hard evidence comes from reputable sources
3. All Sources are within the last 5 years
5. How does the writer address you as the reader?
1. There is quite a bit of background information on things that need it
2. There are basically rhetorical questions that the author asks the readers (inclusive)
3. Yes it is strongly suggested that the author believes his thesis.